02-26-2008, 02:06 PM
I'm taking the Freshman English Composition with essay in a few days so Im trying to practice with some essay prompts. I'm not a strong writer at all, and I failed the essay portion last time I took the test. So please don't just comment that it's good or ok. The last thing I need right now is encouragement - I need to know what I'm doing wrong. First of all, I find that I can only write 4 paragraphs (Intro, 2 body, Conclusion) in 45 minutes. Partly because I write somewhat slow, but mainly because I just can't think of stuff that quick. Im not sure if how big of an issue that is, so if anyone knows, please let me know. This is anonymous, so I don't care if you tear me apart 
, just as long as you let me know what I need to work on.
The prompt is: "The United States government has become so corrupt that people who vote in national elections are wasting their time. Agree or Disagree."
"Calling voting in national elections a waste of time because the United States government is too corrupt is not a valid argument. Our country is founded on the saying "we the people of the United States." By not voting, we take the power of government out of the hands of the many and place it in the hands of the few. While the United States government certainly has flaws, providing it with even more power would lead our country down a dangerous path.
Freedom of speech is one of the greatest blessings we have in this country. We can voice our opinions in numerous ways, including popular methods such as forming interest groups or leading protests. However, our unique right and one that is not provided to many people throughout the world is the right to elect who leads our country. Not only do we get to vote, but we can have confidence that our vote is counted. As a result, those who are running for office must be attentive to the wants and needs of our nation. A protest can be ignored, but the threat of not being elected because of stances on issues is what keeps our elected officials in line.
Furthermore, by not voting, we take power away from the many and place it in the hands of the few. It is said that "power corrupts, but absolute power corrupts absolutely". The meaning of this statement is simple, and was key to the Founding Father's reason for developing a representative democracy. The fewer the people that have a say in government policies, the more corrupt government becomes. This is because that elect group is not supplied with sufficient differing opinions on issues. They rely solely on their own beliefs, rather than those of the people thath their decision will affect.
We as citizens of the United States cannot fall into the trap of believing that our government is too corrupt for our vote to make a difference. Apathy towards voting can only make matters worse. It is our duty and right to voice our opinion on public policy by taking part in national elections. If we do not, we lose our control over the actions of government and give it even more power to make corrupt decisions."
, just as long as you let me know what I need to work on. The prompt is: "The United States government has become so corrupt that people who vote in national elections are wasting their time. Agree or Disagree."
"Calling voting in national elections a waste of time because the United States government is too corrupt is not a valid argument. Our country is founded on the saying "we the people of the United States." By not voting, we take the power of government out of the hands of the many and place it in the hands of the few. While the United States government certainly has flaws, providing it with even more power would lead our country down a dangerous path.
Freedom of speech is one of the greatest blessings we have in this country. We can voice our opinions in numerous ways, including popular methods such as forming interest groups or leading protests. However, our unique right and one that is not provided to many people throughout the world is the right to elect who leads our country. Not only do we get to vote, but we can have confidence that our vote is counted. As a result, those who are running for office must be attentive to the wants and needs of our nation. A protest can be ignored, but the threat of not being elected because of stances on issues is what keeps our elected officials in line.
Furthermore, by not voting, we take power away from the many and place it in the hands of the few. It is said that "power corrupts, but absolute power corrupts absolutely". The meaning of this statement is simple, and was key to the Founding Father's reason for developing a representative democracy. The fewer the people that have a say in government policies, the more corrupt government becomes. This is because that elect group is not supplied with sufficient differing opinions on issues. They rely solely on their own beliefs, rather than those of the people thath their decision will affect.
We as citizens of the United States cannot fall into the trap of believing that our government is too corrupt for our vote to make a difference. Apathy towards voting can only make matters worse. It is our duty and right to voice our opinion on public policy by taking part in national elections. If we do not, we lose our control over the actions of government and give it even more power to make corrupt decisions."
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