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01-27-2019, 06:03 PM
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Anyone want to review my draft of assignment 2? I just finished and submitted it, but this would help for later when I have to submit the final assignment. It was kind of rushed and my writing isn't that good. Attached is the file. Thank you.
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Wow. Hmm... You have over 260 undergrad credits? Your draft seems fine to me. Just like your previous assignment draft. Cool beans! Just continue and keep up the great work.
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Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. My writing seems repetitive to me for some reason. I can't figure out what it is.
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Should I expand the introduction? Add more onto the medical history side of VR?
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01-27-2019, 09:22 PM
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I appreciate you posting your drafts, I haven't seen anyone else post any actual papers except stuff from years ago.
It seems pretty good to me, although I haven't looked at the e-book much yet.
Is the first part/sections basically a synopsis of your 3 research sub-questions and then followed by the references used?
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I think so. I'm not really sure of anything anymore. Hopefully, it's right. I think my 2nd assignment was shorter than everyone else's paper. It was definitely shorter than the sample given to the class.
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01-28-2019, 09:40 AM
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(01-27-2019, 07:30 PM)MrBossmanJr Wrote: Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. My writing seems repetitive to me for some reason. I can't figure out what it is.
Your draft looks good to me. You can always add to it later if you need to. In Chapter 5 you will refer back to Chapter 2 when discussing your results versus what has already been published. You can add to Chapter 2 at that time if you need to add material to refer to.
The structure of the document is very repetitive. By the end, you will feel like you have restated the same information over and over in every way possible.
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(01-28-2019, 09:40 AM)DIGI-212 Wrote: The structure of the document is very repetitive. By the end, you will feel like you have restated the same information over and over in every way possible.
Sounds like every paper I wrote for WGU :-P
